the first chapter is about the main character carl, who is running away from home because his parents suddenly wanted to murder him. plus the world is going to end in four days, and a meteor is going to hit the earth.
this is about a page of the first chapter tell me how you like it, and what i should improve on
Quickly Carl dashed, his feet flying across the hardened snow. He dodged towering trees, leaped over logs and slowed his pace on the ice. Panting, he finally burst to a stop, unable to run any further. Struggling to catch his breath, Carl settled himself on the snow, and rested his back on the surface of a rough tree trunk. The warmth that had approached him while running, quickly disappeared, leaving Carl rather cold.
Silence filled the lifeless, motionless forest. That was the way it should be right now, quiet. Quiet, so Carl could think.
The recent memories haunted him, and remained vivid within his mind. The memories, where his parents had stormed downstairs, with a sharpened kitchen knife, ready to murder him. Still, the voices of horror continued to scream in Carl’s consciousness. Speaking, they were insulting and swearing, at him. Believe it or not, this was the voice of Carl’s parents.
The scratches, bruises, and bleeding that invested Carl’s arms reminded him of these horrible thoughts.
He had always apprehended, though that his parents had disliked him, ever since he was very young. Though, never did Carl think that they wished to kill him until this moment. Unlike other regular parents, they had never took the time to educate him, about riding a bike, or playing chess. In Carl’s family it was extremely rare to do any sort of activity together, like going to the swimming pool, or traveling out of the country. That was an affair that he had always desired to experience, travelling. Only his parents didn’t invest much fund, and a vacation was none of their interests.
so would you be interested in reading more than this?? (the story is a lot more exciting than this trust me, with a lot of more characters)